Comments on: I Already Proofread This Research Paper, But I’m Still Not Sure If It’s Good Enough. Can You Help Me??

By: VISHU

VISHU — Fri, 23 Oct 2009 00:36:36 +0000

well ur research in very nice and impressive, u hav collected very insight information over this topic nd it is really commendable…
in my opinion ur research is very informative and it will surely make a lasting impression to whom so ever u will show it….
b confident, ur work is gud…

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By: Paula P

Paula P — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 23:59:12 +0000

Do spell check you mispelled a lot of words
Also use Seven not 7
Rawford should be capitalized
use did not not didn’t
1878 semi colon not comma

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By: b0yzer

b0yzer — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 23:45:57 +0000

Your paper reflects thorough research and hard work. Good job! The only piece of advice I can give you is to tweak your introduction a little bit.
All introductions need to give a small preview of what the reader will encounter throughout the paper. If this were my paper, I would have started it off with the anecdote about Long’s experience at ether frolics. The description you give is both eye catching and funny to read. I believe if you start the essay off with this, it will provide great insight into the main topic of your essay. At the end of your introduction you should mesh your entire essay together with your thesis statement such as, “These ether frolics eventually lead to Long’s discovery of anesthesia”. The following paragraph should be your explanation of what anesthesia is and the biography of Long.
Also, try to exclude terms like “Lala Land” from a research paper. A research paper is supposed to be professional and childish references aren’t needed.

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